There are two way of traveling. One is backpacking and the other is tour travel trip.
The similarities between the two are that they are all going traveling and go sightseeing. But they have many differences. The first is that tour travelers will pay more money than backpackers. Because a travel agency in order to earn more money and they will take tourists to many spots to buy souvenirs or specialty goods. The second is that backpackers have more freedom in choosing spots. They can go more spots than tour travelers. The third is that backpackers can schedule their times but tour travelers have no independency. Their route is scheduled by tour agency. In conclusion, no matter you are individual travels or tour travelers, you can enjoy in traveling
First of all, I would ike to say that it's good you have listed some similarities and some differences. However, it is a pity that you didn't fully develop your article, which resulted in a short piece of work. For example, you can sort of develop an introduction in the beginning of the work. Also, you should talk a bit more about the similarities. It is not a good idea to drop a simple line like what you did. In addition to these, I don't think 'you can enjoy in traveling' is connected to its previous clause. Why don't you read it again and tell me what went wrong with it?
回覆刪除Yet, it is good to see you're getting improved in grammar. Less grammatical mistakes are found in this article than your previous ones. :)