2010年5月13日 星期四

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I hate doing labor education because I have to get up in the early morning and start to clean the campus. It is very hard to get up in the early morning and you cannot wear nightclothes and slippers, so you have to get up earlier to dress yourself. It's very difficult for a person who goes to bad late to get up early. However, it also has advantages on labor education. Firstly, you can make more friends with people from other departments. Secondly, in the end of echelon, labor leaders will prepare some snack for us. Thirdly, we can make our campus more beautiful and our mood will also be better.

In my opinion, I think labor education on campus is meaningful; it trained us to do our job well. But it is not necessary to do it every day. Maybe we can do it just once a week or twice a month. Finally, my freshmen labor work is going to the end. In the beginning, I was very confused about why we have to do this job every day and it is also a compulsory course. But when I knew other campus's students are the same as us, I felt more comfortable at least we are not the only school having this compulsory course.

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  1. Hi Ruby,

    覺得你這一篇的文法用得不錯喔
    組織的也滿好的
    點跟點之間有連結, good job.

    其他的小錯誤如下:

    1.I hate doing labor education because I have to get up in early morning and start to clean the campus.
    是in the early morning

    2.It is very hard to get up in the early morning and you cannot wear nightclothes and slippers, so you have get up earlier to dress yourself.
    第一、學校規定不能穿nightclothes and slppers??真的嗎?
    第二、...so you have "to"不見了

    3. It's very difficult for a person who go to bad lately but have to get up early.
    改成: It is very difficult for a person who goes to bed late to get up early. 有看出差別嗎?

    4. Firstly, you can make more friends form other departments.
    改成: ...make more firends with people from other departments.

    5.Thirdly, we can make our campus more beautiful and our mood will also be better.
    (這是真心話嗎?)

    6.In my opinion , I think labor education on campus is meaningful, It trained us to do our job well.
    中間看一下

    7. In the beginning , I was very confused ,why should we do this job every day and It's also a obligatory course.
    你的It很愛大寫耶?
    改: I was very confused ABOUT why we have to do this job every day and why it is a compulsory course.

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